harveyjames Anna Anthropy told me I am here to offer professional advice and critique, so here goes nothing: If this was a first-year illustration crit and I was your tutor I would suggest you could have lost the dialogue and instead have her pawing at where her cape used to be, or maybe looking at a picture of someone with a long and luxurious cape in a cape magazine, or looking over her shoulder to see her torn clothes and bare back while a spider makes off with the rest of her cape.
slut i am sad because this entry sucks
auntie this was done in flash, which might be why jill felt it necessary to take off her clothes. she apparently didn't get past the cape before being overcome by a powerful melancholia.